ERIC Number: ED071077
Record Type: RIE
Publication Date: 1969
Three Strategies for Revising Sentences, Grades 4-5-6.
Students in grades 4, 5, or 6 can learn to write more concretely, accurately, and deliberately by employing three strategies: (1) elimination of those words or phrases that garble meaning or repeat unnecessarily; (2) substitution of more specific, concrete, and generally more appropriate expressions for ones that are vague and unimaginative; and (3) addition of words, phrases, and clauses to a sentence to improve the focus on an image or an impression in writing and the texture of the sentence. To motivate the students toward "elimination," the teacher can ask them to distinguish between sets of sentences, to feed back information to the writer, and to listen to their own written expressions via tape recordings. "Substitution" can be approached through improving the focus in the subject and verb parts of sentences, listing substitution choices for given expressions, and distinguishing between good and weak comparisons. "Addition" can be accomplished in the fourth grade by reducing and combining sentences, in the fifth grade by converting simple sentences to clauses modifiers, and in the sixth grade by adding to pre- and post-modifying slots. (HS)
Descriptors: Connected Discourse, Grade 4, Grade 5, Grade 6, Paragraph Composition, Sentence Structure, Syntax, Writing (Composition), Writing Exercises, Writing Skills
National Council of Teachers of English, 1111 Kenyon Road, Urbana, Ill. 61801 (Stock No. 32850, $0.75 non-member, $0.65 member)
Publication Type: N/A
Education Level: N/A
Authoring Institution: Indiana Council of Teachers of English, Terre Haute.